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The letter starts with an introduction by the candidate saying that he is a student from New York University (NYU) followed by his educational focus. The writer mentions that he is majoring in three disciplines including diverse subjects like economics, mathematics, and computer science. Then the writer begins by mentioning his qualities and attributes such as punctual, personable, and shrewd after which he goes on to say that he is proud of himself for possessing a quality such as hard work. The presence of the word “pride” conjures up an image of an arrogant and self-obsessed individual who has so shamelessly mentioned his supposedly remarkable quality in a way that others might not possess. This comes off as too confident in a way that reflects a negative aspect of the candidate. This is also true for risky writings because their detachment from normality often generates negative responses which are also a likely consequence in this case.